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Monday, May 1, 2023

Girl in the Mist


Clare in the mist, photo prompt
 
‘Today, I will watch for him today,’ Clare thought, staring out across the bay.

The mist roiled about her, soaking her to the skin.  Clare shivered and then her skin relaxed in the warmth that followed.  Listening for a sound, she found herself in a cocoon of fog and silence. 

How many days had Jackson been gone?  ‘Today is three-hundred eighty-four’, she rolled the number around in her head.  Flash images of his back as he slung his rucksack  over his shoulder, growing smaller in the distance as he rowed his curragh away from her—that’s all she could see now.  His face was a blur, lost in a mist itself.

Still no sound, Clare strained to hear, to see just a hint that Jackson was coming back to her, that he would stay this time.

Then a sound, ker-plunk, broke the stillness of the air, the glassiness of the water.


This is a repeat from 2011. The story is from my head.

We are heading to Illinois to see our son and family.  Please leave a message!  




16 comments:

  1. Enjoy your time with your son and his family. Too many women have watched and waited. And too often in vain...

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    1. Ireland stands out in my mind. "Field of Athenry" is about a man being shipped to Australia, leaving a wife and baby behind.

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  2. I really like that photo, and that story, it was written so well!

    Have a great time!

    God Bless!

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    1. The photo had so many directions it could go. Glad you enjoyed the story.

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  3. I remember this. Have a great time with son and family.

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  4. I had to reread one part because I though 'what a man'! Throwing his nutsack over his shoulder.

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  5. have fun with your son. love the short story

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    1. We are so glad to have this chance to see our gr-kids.

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  6. Your short stories are so entertaining. And you even have a cliff-hanger at the end.

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    1. Always believe in having an open ended story.

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  7. I love the story you began here, Susan, and I hope you will finish it. Have a wonderful visit with your family!

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    1. I don't think that I will go any further with this.

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Go ahead...it won' t hurt...I'd love to hear what you think!