Monday, February 27, 2012

The Scent of Sage

Evil Genius Awaits You...Are You Ready?


Dr. Whitehead approached the room cautiously.  Uniforms moved out of her way, touching their caps respectfully.  ‘That Strange Lady M.E.’ didn’t come to every murder.  Just to ones like this.

In the room lay the mutilated body of an old man.  His long gray hair, streaked with blood, had been plaited over the slashed face, and a raven’s feather rested atop the brow.

Dove Whitehead stood over the body, peering around with telescope eyes, focusing on what was there, and more importantly, what wasn’t there.

Where was the blood spray?  The pooling blood beneath the body?  The splatters of blood drops on the wooden floor?  There were none.

Dove turned her eyes to search the room, not moving from the spot where she stood.  The man had lived here on the reservation for eighty years, nearly all his life.  Where were the accumulations of a lifetime?  The room was spartan, with the simplest of belongings. 

Closing her eyes, Dr. Dove Whitehead tilted her head and shut out all sounds.  Lifting her hands over the body, Dove inhaled.  It was there, the evil was there.

The scent of salt.  The scent of blood.  The scent of sage.



Word count: 200

23 comments:

  1. Sounds like we have the makings of an interesting character here.

    Lee
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  2. Wow..the hair is standing up on my head.

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    1. WOW It's eerie and all that's needed in 200 words. Great job.

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  4. Oooh!! I want to know more! Who was the old man? Why would anyone want to kill him? And where WAS his lifelong belongings? I'm intrigued. GREAT job!!

    Jen

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  5. Spine tingling! Outstanding read ...

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  6. All good questions, to which I do not yet have the answers. If I develop Dove Whitehead into a bigger story, those questions will eventually be answered. Just not yet. Thanks to each of you for your comments!

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  7. Strange and enticing...

    :-)

    Pearl

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  8. brrrrrrrr that gave me the shivers. This needs to get more!

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  9. Nice, very creepy and does bring forth such questions, all of which were asked. Be interesting if it developed into more.

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    1. It will be developed, but after much research.

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  10. I'm intrigued. All very mysterious and one wonders what the answers to the baffling questions, might be.
    Excellent and happy writing.
    In kindness and a hearty thanks for your encouraging comment on my site, Gary :)

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  11. Very eerie story, and I love the fact that the evil genius behind the murders is never actually seen or physically described.

    Thank you for participating in the blogfest!

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  12. Very well written and scary in an unknown way.

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  13. All of your work is fabulous, yet suspense could be your forte. This is the first of such that I've read, and I'd like to read more ...

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    2. I believe the most frightening evil is that which we cannot see, whose motives are disguised. It is a bit like a strip-teaser, Gypsy Rose, who always said something like "leave them wanting more". Until the evil is revealed, the reader has to stay and follow the reveal.

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  15. Oh, scintillating! Well done.

    Shannon at The Warrior Muse, co-host of the 2012 #atozchallenge! Twitter: @AprilA2Z

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Go ahead...it won' t hurt...I'd love to hear what you think!